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empathic life
2008-02-24
ch 2,
abuseWow... I'm sure I reviewed the original forever ago, but reading it now, I think I'll put in some new critique and such. For the original, that is. I like the overall idea, but the poem seems to get redundant for a bit in the middle, and it feels like we don't really get into the true heart of it until almost the end... And for the rewrite: I definitely like the changes... I believe you took out some lines in the middle, which makes it an easier read, to me... But the second to last stanza, which I think you added, seems a bit out of place; it's gorgeous, don't get me wrong. It's just hard to mix your old writing with your new.

Well, would you believe it? I haven't reviewed this one before. So now I'll add in all the nice, pretty compliments that I thought I had already given... >.< Very unique and interesting idea, with the whole superman metaphor dealy. I love the color imagery, and the allusion to the old rose-tinted glasses idea. An original take on sunsets. I love it.

Yours, Alex
burning in effigy
2008-01-21
ch 2,
abusehonest poem

"We don’t want to/humanize our saviors,/we want to immortalize them." truth depresses me.

like how you redirected the focus of the same poem; great job :]
burning in effigy
2008-01-21
ch 1,
abuseinteresting transition into superman- but i love the last stanza. beautiful; paints a picture in my head
Dice Darwin
2008-01-19
ch 2,
abuseThis was amazing. It’s makes me wonder why I ever stopped reading poetry. Oddly enough, I can relate to this in a way. I’m no hero or celebrity (just give it time), but during my last run on this site, I sure was propped up pretty high by most people. I felt the pressure for too long, and I cracked on the inside. Though, that only revealed my yummy core, so it was good.

Even if your story “Dora Blink: Vampress Without Sight” was a yucky vampire-filled thing (ha), your poetry is pretty cool.
WyrdWolf
2008-01-14
ch 2,
abuseMuch more Superman-Lois Lane references in this one, I noticed. That's good; gives Superman a much better sense of humanity.

Loved the line

'Wearing our shades, we are
content. But when the world matches
the shade of our shades,
we can’t hide behind our delusions
anymore'

Wolfie
twilightwolf666
2007-01-11
ch 1,
abuseThis was really good. so is this about like The guy who played superman or superman himself?
?
(^_^)





~Bob~
Osunale
2006-10-29
ch 1,
abuseIncredible. I love the use of color to ever so carefully pull the narrative along and relate it to the more abstract general picture. Well done and worth repeat readings.
Spirit Tigress
2006-10-18
ch 1,
abuseYet again, Iam left speechless. Uhh, I have a word coming...wow. Sorry that's all I can think of again.

Dark Revival
wildwolffree17
2006-10-07
ch 1,
abuseThis is... amazing. Well done, m'dear.
Burnt Bread
2006-10-04
ch 1,
abuseFor me this poem spoke of the pain of staying strong while the world around you falls down.

Sidenote: Superman rocks hardcore.

Favourite stanza:

three dollars says that Supermandoesn’t watch the sunset.Too tired to carry on,he can’t take the depressing mix ofheart-break pink and lost-soul purple.

"But duty, duty must be done, the rule applies to everyone" ;) And it's tragic when who you are is so far away from who you wish to be. this superman seems torn between doing what's right and what you want to do.

Talking about doing the right thing, I should be getting on with my assignments again...

Bread
sarah1491
2006-10-04
ch 1,
abuseIt's amazing. :) How do you write so wonderfully? I mean, it is awesome!

- Sarah
the-foresight
2006-10-04
ch 1,
abuseWow, you speak so naturally in this, at no point does it sound forced, It flows beautifully. And is funny, it just is so REAL. I love it.

And to answer your question, I guess I am a bit of a romantic. I don't always write love poems/songs. It's just at the moment it's been on my mind a lot. Anyway, great poem!
WyrdWolf
2006-10-03
ch 1,
abuseDamn, Felicia, you never cease to utterly blow me away with your poetry! I loved how you went from a deep, poetry section to a bit of a story-telling part, then back again.

'Superman martyred in frontof a sunset of heart-break pinkand lost-soul purple'

is just an awesome line, totally. The best. Way to go, girl!
Moondog Dozier
2006-10-03
ch 1,
abuseWow. This is marvelous. I like how you've infused color throughout the entire work to relate directly to emotion and the overall concept. Interesting and thought provoking topic. Very unique, as it can relate to everyday heroes, as well as societal heroes. Very well developed. Putting on favorites. Well done
aka Meteor-Infinity
2006-10-03
ch 1,
abuseHey, I just joined Aka MI, thanks to Yjan...can't wait to start getting involved in all the projects!

Anyway, onto the review! Like the others, I also felt Superman's pain, which is good. The poem itself was, in my opion at least, pretty unconvential in terms of the stanzas never being the same length, or containing sentences that ran from one line to another...and that's just great! There's too many people on FP who wall under the mistake that poems either have to be haikus or rhyming couplets (ABAB, ABBA...who cares? And what have they got to do with it anyways? XDD), and it's refreshing to see someone willing to break the trend and be original.

Nice work, I'm going to add you to Fave authors and Alert, same as all the other members. See you around!

SympleSymon
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