That crude ** called life had put cyanide in my lemonade.
~awesome, i'm obsessed with analogies and personification, could you tell? lol keep it up

Hyacinthe,

I swear you should write songs. These lines are so lyrical and beautiful. I also like the lines the the reviewer below me mentioned. Your writing style is harsh and it has tons of emotion. fav.

*chucks an Almond Joy*

Great work,
Surreal

oh dear. i love this. favorite line: "My words, my words, my crowing wicked birds,/to pluck out the heart he offered me and swallow it in thirds." amazing. i could go on and on about all the little things i love...keep writing stuff like this. even though it's not exactly the cheeriest thing i've ever read, it most definitely made my day.