Pretty good, but in the first paragraph the word tendancy doesn't seem to fit. Also, in the second paragraph, you say that you were 'wearing nothing but a t-shirt and some shorts.' That's a sort of 'she had nothing on her feat but two sox and two shoes...' I don't think you need the word nothing if you go into a bit more detail about the stains themselves.

"..his life had sputtered and popped too soon..."

I love the imagery you create with this story and the metaphor between the boy's life and the glass-the fragility of human existance? emotions? I wonder. Great job. :D

Wow... Just... Wow! That ws amazig! Just a little story, and I even had little tears forming in my eyes! I lov the metaphor, with the Holding glass, and Life... It's pretty awesome!

This is an interesting piece. Very well written, and conveys a lot in such a short piece of writing. Very impressed.

Spawny

XD omg i loved it. it was a short simple one shot that wasn't at all simple. it was complex and wonderful... and i'm sounding all weird... but i did love it. it was amaseing