I really liked how you captured Spartan life in this piece. You managed to portray the rigidity of their training, but you didn't turn them into inhuman fighting machines. I think that it would be easy to makes Spartans overly brutal, but you didn't. On the whole, you managed to avoid anachronism, as well, which is a problem that I always have with historical fiction. "The sun is getting to you" seemed a little odd, but then, I am a nit picker.

Anyway, good job, I really did enjoy this story. Keep up the good work.