Im loving this :) Not usually the kind of thing that gets me reading but this is good (: Loving the 2 end lines. Its kinda ironic (?)

Really good :)

Abi xx

woah i loved it.
xoxo, Ally

this is one of best things I've read.amazing and kind of haunting

Loved the second stanza more than the others, but its still an incredible poem throughout.

Mob

No one's lucky in this one, huh?

I like it, naturally. :)

disturbingly reminds me of the VTech incident. it was so sad.

This is beautiful. Great work.

i like this alot. I liked the last two lines the best very well writen great job

Equal parts trauma, depression, love, betrayal, and deep rooted psychological problems. Stir well for several years until you hear the shot.

Very nice.

Later...

Creepy. Love it.

Very true social statement in this. The work itself is also very well developed, as it directly addresses the issue by being specific, and giving the reader images to connect to. Well written.

Wow, I liked this. The ending and third stanza are great.

WOW. one of the best poems i've read in awhile. i like the 3rd stanza especially. good work.