Nice. Characters are well devellopped and you make and excellent point about the smoking thing, I sarted that young and I'm sorry I ever did. Keep it up.
This was like reading a little piece of someone's life. Very interesting. You write dialogue very well. I can hear three boys actually saying these things. I think this would be great if it was continued or part of a bigger play.. but even if it's not, it's pretty awesome. Great writing!
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