|Reviews for The Rose and the Thorn, Original version|
| Danielle 10/17/08 . chapter 26
I was worried how bekah was behaving at first, but she made a wise decision at the end here. Good for her.
| Plej 6/5/08 . chapter 27
Ah, you have broke my streak of reviewing after a I finished the entire story. This story is refreshingly realistic, about drugs, life, depression and what not, and about all the things people go through to get rid of it. It is enlightning so to speak. And I'm suprised that your story has inspired me. Not to pursue a relationship with a high school teacher! That would be impossible for me! Partly considering that I already graduated high school, lol. Anyway it is inspiring to me as a fellow writer myself. You do a good job of mapping thigs out and dealing out the suspense, that keeps me cliking for the next page. Lovely voice, and this is a story a reader can't help but get connected to, even though it's in second person. That just makes me want to try harder too. Lovely story and I'm definately going to keep on reading.
| Miss-X-Marie 4/17/08 . chapter 67
*BANGS HEAD REPEATEDLY AGAINST WALL*
YOU NEED TO UPDATE
YOU NED TO OR I WILL GO INSANE!
i just started reading yours story last night so didnt comment on each chapter but i wanted to say that this is truly amazing!
i think you could get this published because MY GOD this is better than some of the published books i have read!
i also like how your taking the student/teacher relationship
a lot of times when i read about that (and trust me i read a LOT of student/teacher stories...im a little obsessed with a teacher of mine) it seems so cliche and idk...weird...
and i just wanted to let you know...if you had set this book in New York...the age of consent is 17 n_n
i look forward to finish reading this!
please please please PLEASE hurry! *gets down on knees and pleads*
| davinci333 4/10/08 . chapter 66
I started reading this story the other night, and finished it last night...read it without sleeping the first night cause I couldn't stop! Fantastic story...heart-wrenching though, and it's creepy cause it feels like you're reading my mind at times...there's a certain special teacher of my own when I was in high school, who seems very similar to the one in your story in so many ways...except Canadian...lol
| Norel 3/22/08 . chapter 71
I really liked the beginning of this story a lot. Between the depression and the student/teacher romance, there was so much to love. But I felt like the story was a bit too drawn out and long towards the end, and it became sort of repetitive. Maybe if she had been closer to eighteen to begin with (like maybe seventeen) the story would have been sorter and less repetitive. I'm only saying this because I loved the beginning so much; I loved reading about how they fell in love and also about how she got out of her depression; the part of truly amazing to read, and it felt so real.
| Norel 3/21/08 . chapter 22
This is absolutely wonderful! I've spent the better half of my night reading this so I'm going to try and finish it tomorrow, but I really do love it! The teacher/student cliche works really well here, especially because of the added dynamic of her sister being dead.
| Jaina-Skylar 1/6/08 . chapter 54
Wow, I've been reading your story this weekend (hoping to finish tonight :)) and I just wanted to say that I think you've done a fabulous job with this. I absolutely love the emotion and the wording and all in all it's a very very well writen story, very good job.
I wanted to comment on this chapter specifically because of something you wrote at the beginning. "She’d picture herself handing bouquets of black roses to God, and He’d hand them back in multiple colors- red, pink, and white… and still a few black, because, He’d explain, if not for the black roses, people wouldn’t learn and grow."
I was reading a book last night and when I read that, my mind automatically went to this passage in the book. (it's kind of long, so bear with me) The book is called "The Cobra Event" and it's about biological warfare, but there was this one paragraph that stuck out in particual to me.
"It was Charles Darwin who first understood that evolution is caused by natural selection, and that natural selection is death. He also understood that vast amounts of death (vast amounts of natural selection) are required to effect a small permanent change in the shape or behavior of an organism. Without huge amounts of death, organisms do not change over time. Without death, life would never have become more complex than the simplest self-copying molecules. The arms of a starfish could not have happened without countless repetitions of death. Death is the mother of structure. It took four billion years of death – a third of the age of the universe – for death to invent the human mind. Given another four billion years of death, or perhaps a hundred billion years of death, who can say that death will not create a mind so effective and subtle that it will reverse the fate of the universe and become God? The smell in the Manhattan morgue is not the smell of death; it is the smell of life changing its form. It is evidence that life is indestructible."
Sorry that that paragraph was kinda long, but I found that, kinda, fit your story. At least that small part of it.
Can't wait to finish it... now I've gotta get back to Bo-Becka and Dan! Bye!
| angelaparton 11/25/07 . chapter 74
Wow, cliffhanger ending! I'll have to read the sequel now.
I was trying to decide which version of this story to read first so I went with the original. Glad I did! Are the others just as good? Your stories totally remind me of this book called Flander's Point by Jacquie Gordon. It's also a student/teacher story set in a private school in the 50's. It's one of my favorites and I think you'd really like it too! You should check it out.
Anyway, great story! I especially love the beginning bits when they were dealing with the attraction, just getting to know eachother, etc. The religious thing was an intersting spice to add so is Rose's depression - I liked that. Great job D
| Lady Moonwind 11/18/07 . chapter 74
Wow. This story is so good! Really, the characters seem so real. Can't wait to read the sequel!
| heartfeltlove 11/4/07 . chapter 18
iF SPIDER MAN CAME TAPPIN ON MY WINDOW i WOULD KICK HIS ASS
| heartfeltlove 11/4/07 . chapter 14
I wish my teacher was as cool as
| WesternPrincess 9/6/07 . chapter 75
I just wanted to let you know that I deeply enjoyed this story and really admire how you literally bring these characters to life. I'm also so glad to find such a well written and eloquent story that is based around a Christian couple. It's even better because they made mistakes. And I know how it is to be seventeen and in love with a man that's "too old". Though my guy's nine years older then me. It sucks. Two more months. Anyway. I'm off to read the sequel.
| Le Cosmonaute 6/26/07 . chapter 16
No! So close! Gah! Well, there are 75 chapters, so it makes sense, and it's more realistic this way. I think Bekah is sort of becoming like Diana from Precious Pearls (or vice versa?) So it seems that you're characters are a little too similar, although-and they're getting close-Dan and John do have big differences, but you might want to watch out. I think the plot differences saves it. It's a good plot, and I love reading it, but there doesn't seem to be major conflict anymore. I suppose that will be resolved...or unresolved? If it's a pronlem it would have to be... Anyway, watch out for grammar, but great speed, and great work!
| Le Cosmonaute 6/25/07 . chapter 14
I love reading Dan's letters! They make me smile... You're awfully good (oxymoron?) at changing your writing style to fit each person, which is some feat, so congratulations! Great chapter, and I'm so glad Laice is getting help! I start worrying about your characters like they're friends! That...shows how good you are at capturing individual personalities and developing the hell out of them. Spectacular work! See, I'm getting new adjectives. Neat. I'm going to read more, then, and I can't wait to see how this will all end!
| Le Cosmonaute 6/24/07 . chapter 6
Yay! I love your plot! It's a lot different from your other ones, and I'm liking this one best. Mr. Fields is a great character. he's so light-hearted with that serious edge if things go too far. Great charcter developement, by the way. They're so true to life. Usually in these stories the character is always depressed, nothing cheers them up, but this is more realistic, because even depressed or semi-depressed people laugh sometimes. I was kind of edging that way for a while, and this is really accurate! Actually, a teacher helped me out of it, too, though he doesn't know it. Is it that weird for a teacher to give you a ride? Oh my. Well, you have more grammatical mistakes in this story, and your space bar seems to be not working in places. Splendid, otherwise.