This is incredibly sexy, Trey. You've got a lot in you.

I hope you decide to continue with this; it has a lot of potential, I think.

I love this, completely love this. I have this thing for vampires, you see;)
I love your writing style as well, it's really good!

i loved it and can not wait to read the next chapter

Lovely. It's becoming clear that you have your mind set on this one, and that's good that you found a project you're comfortable with. I hope to hear more.

B.

P.S. You joined my C2 community... so... at least I know you don't hate me, yeah? I still wish to hear from you though.

O...vampires. @_@ *intrigued*

*cough*

That aside...you describe things very well. :D I like how your chapters aren't just dialogue and action (I must work on that) and I like your use of vocabulary. ^_^; If you don't mind me being a bit nitpicky about punctuation and all that, you might want to put commas and/or periods (depending) before your ending quotation marks. (Yes, I'm picky, but you still love me, right?)

I want to see how Alan and Rayne come across Jack Rose (love the name, by the way. And the description of his eyes. @_@) This is still the beginning, so I'm not sure about suggestions, but talk to me anytime. Please tell me you have AIM. o.o; My sn is always NeoDiji. xD;

Luff you, Trey! *glomp*

-Kara

Wow, what a terrifying and consuming creature Jack Rose is! I love the story, and his name! It all intrigues me. :)

-speechless- or not it was awesome is there gonna be more oh i hope theres gonna be more i loved it please let there be more!

Great write-up. I like a good vampire story, but yours definitely looks like it will be better than most I've read. Good to see more out of you, Raven; keep it up.

B.