Reviews for It's an American Thing

Reviews For: It's an American Thing

hey maria 2007-03-17 ch 1,	abuseI think the word "girls" is repeated too many times towards the end. I love this poem. Freedom is relative.
smile persephone 2007-01-07 ch 1,	abuseI applaud you for your genius. You portrayed the message in a perfectly explicit way. This poem speaks volumes.
poet tree 2007-01-02 ch 1,	abuseI like the repetition and how you call the readers "girls". Oh so cynical. I quite like it.
SnoWhiteQueen 2006-11-11 ch 1, anon.	abuseI really like this. It makes wonderful points. adding a good "**" in there never hurts. It doesn't make it vulgar either. A bit angsty(intellectual angst) but it keeps a good quality.
Stitch-Puppy 2006-11-10 ch 1,	abuseI can't really help you much with what's not so good as I'm not really an expert on this sort of work. But I can tell you what I thought helped it. Salty repeated. The syntax remains about the same for many lines. For this work, it flows easier. The lines were it differs are well placed so you don't have too many in a row. I liked it. I got the point. The one sad note that perhaps should have been addressed is that, according to millions of woman over the world, we are lucky to be able to have our faces show and make money even in these ways. Because although it is sickening, it’s better then starving, being beaten or killed and having no one to even think it’s wrong. I really did like however. And I do appreciate how you are showing how screwed up society is. Much Love -Stitches
no.peace.los.angeles 2006-10-08 ch 1,	abuseDamn. The tone of this piece is fierce. The scathing sarcasm comes across very nicely, and some of the descriptive words in this were awesome ("white salty ** in white salty pearls staining red lips"). Nice. Keep writing! :)
jadedmari 2006-10-03 ch 1,	abuseNice imagery. You certainly got your message across. I like it.

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