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| sweden 2007-09-15 ch 1,  | abusewow. i really like this. everything flows, all the words and sentences and, wow! i like the words you chose. i don't know if it's because english is not my first language, but they're beautiful. very imagery.. um, how can i say it? i don't know, the first two sentences reminded me of a kaleidoscope, some kind of dream.. i love it. |
| franticsquirrel 2007-02-22 ch 1, | abuseI like the surreal images- like some underwater bond intro, but poetic. they work very well with the 'shirking' that you're describing. nice job. |
| subsist 2006-12-23 ch 1, | abusereminds me of an unrequited emotion. |
| citrus scented 2006-10-11 ch 1, | abusethis is such a well written piece. It slides and slips and twists and turns from image to image, a kalidoscope of feelings and descriptions working together to great this atmosphere of confusion...why this person wont look them in the eye. " hands are quiet: they restin the back of my mind "...this is beautiful, and a great example of how you transition this images into each other. beautifully written. |
| faking closure 2006-10-07 ch 1, | abusethis is gorgeous and so are you -naomi |
| x.beauty.x.from.x.pain.x 2006-10-06 ch 1, | abusethis is just gorgeous, as always. i love the imagery of 'swimming through the haze of a thousand changing colors' -- beautifully written. 'our enigmatic starburst of light' -- gorgeous line. for some reason, (through dark and swaying bodies) is especially powerful in parenthesis -- a strong effect, and the last line is perfection. definitely a favorite. |
| a lonely september 2006-10-05 ch 1, | abusethis poem is so distorted, but amazingly so. it's just so beautiful, the images change and blend and shine and tilt&bend and it's just so beautiful. wonderfully written, and the longing in there is so crystal clear. this is a poem that has many clear colors ... it reminds me of a kaliedoscope. |
| multiples of six 2006-10-04 ch 1, | abuseDear God, how I wish I could write like that. Every single word is so perfect. You can see it. It's sad, but written beautifully.. |
| Aquafied 2006-10-04 ch 1, | abusecould i ever spin to think reminds me of silk in watercolorful silk and the thought, it is under friendshipinteresting |