That was So sweet!

cute story :) i like the ending...it's nice and conclusive...i kind of don't like it when people leave it too open-ended but you did a great job in that area :D

keep writing!

Aw, so cute. I feel quite amused that romance can begin in a Laundromat. ((I like your depiction of the girl, because I find her adorable.))

This was so cute!! You did a great job...:)

cute real cute,
liked d originality...

If I were a real harpy, I'd say that lover boy is a total wet blanket/sap, maybe that's what makes him such a catch...Long live the Laundromat!

Great work,
E.

great shot!


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LOVED IT...I usually don't read one-shot's but this one captivated me just by reading the summary...I loved it... I wish that it weren't just a one-shot...

You're story is awesome! When will you add the next chapter?

good concept. and good ideas.
but it didnt flow very well and the execution was poor.
i'd like to see this re-written with more...detail and depth.

I think this story is perfection. It's a love story that doesn't have any of that cringe factor from the overdramatic and cheesy plotlines. I love how the guy in a band fell for a quiet, sociology studying girl. It's very charming.

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You have a really great original voice that helped this story to stand apart on it's own. Some of the lines came off as a little...I'm not sure if cheesy is the right word and I wish you'd shown how eccentric the boy was rather than just telling.

You captured the awkwardness of first meetings that many authors overlook- I never like it when they get *too* familiar *too* soon, but you handled this perfectly well.

Great job!

Wow, that's absolutely amazingly sweet. It's awkward, cute, and genuinely funny. I like it. There's a good succession of events, and I like that it's more of a moment than a saga in short story form. It's a wonderful moment.

Ohu, it's really cute! I like it!^^

i loved this. It was short and sweet! xD