its so you! beautiful!!

Absolutely delightful. -loves- The flow, the word choice... The last line tied it all together and ended it perfectly. Lovely job.

~Mani

Beautiful imagery! I loved this piece. Keep writing!

Wow. I was not expecting this. The spider metaphor has been done countless times, but this is so original. The imagery in this is very beautiful, and I love the rhythm. The only criticism I have is that the last line breaks the amazing flow. I like the meaning in it, but it doesn't sound right to me. But I really liked this, and I think you have talent. Keep writing.