This is really amazing - the imagery is so vivid that it makes you feel something that's beyond logic, just instinctual.

I can't wait to see all this works in progress. :)

wow.

"we are poweful because we have survived"...that really rings in your head.

I like the "nights bruised and broken" it really gives off this vivid and traumatising image.

I like the format of those images first, and then the repeat of "it is after" it works well.

The pace works well too, its quite fast at first with the long, busy lines...then slows down for the grande finale and then...

wow...that sentence just seems to hang in the air. effective.

I really like this one! (yeah i do still read them occasionally ;-) ) My only suggestion is about rhythmical. As much as i like "palpitating" as a word, for some reason a two or three syllable word would flow better there. "Throbbing" perhaps? "writhing" if you want it more evocative... It's up to you. In any case, it's great!

Freaky...O.O I love it.