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| bitterpaper 2006-10-08 ch 1,  | abuseWow, I'm glad you wrote this! I think you captured his reaction quite well--the initial confusion, his feelings for her (as they clearly run beneath just him wanting to score) and then his resolution that she's not worth it because she's just a tease. "I won't hound you for a second date"...that rings very true. Especially how he says before that: "And there is not some other girl/I look forward to knowing." Both these pieces capture the situation and the narrators perfectly..awesome job! |