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| P.H. Wise 2006-10-06 ch 1, | abuseIf the best way to criticise a poem is to write a better one, then Robert Frost has already done the job for me: "Nature's first green is gold, Her hardest hue to hold. Her early leaf's a flower; But only so an hour. Then leaf subsides to leaf. So Eden sank to grief, So dawn goes down to day. Nothing gold can stay." |
| An-Author-At-Heart 2006-10-06 ch 1, | abuseBeautiful!! The imagery was so lovely, well written. Gosh, it makes you want to step outside and just ran across a park filled with trees while they turn colours! I really liked the writing style of it, the rhymes were not the usual pattern and scheme yet it still flowed so nicely. Wonderful job, keep up the good work! |
| CELESTIAL*VISIONARY 2006-10-06 ch 1, anon. | abuseI like that,it was very placid. I admit I only understood half of it but still...Here's a poem I think you'll like. I think it's by Robert Frost:Nature's first green is goldHer hardest hue to holdHer early leaf's a flowerBut only so an hourThen leaf subsides to leafSo Eden sank to griefSo dawn goes down to dayNothing gold can stay. Good job. Keep writing. Constance |