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| Twilight Starr 2008-07-10 ch 1,   | Amazing job. You really told the story well and got into character. I'm impressed. Nice work. Keep writing! ~Twilight Starr~ |
| Hoodwynk 2008-02-18 ch 1, | I like the desperation of her thoughts, how nothing she does goes right. Hopes leads to desire, which creates goals, which creates a purpose in life, which rises one above the horrors of both life and death. Except, what happens if one loses hope? Just a thought. |
| Nkiki Gnol 2007-09-22 ch 1, | Nice use of personification in the beginning *yay i actually learned something in English!* and i really liked the last like "the greatest gift in life, is death" very creepy! I like how you can write good first person fics..i don't know but i can never write them. Nice fic! |
| Sooty Wing 2006-10-24 ch 1, | I really feel sorry for this gal. I mean, because she never did anything right, she became obsessed with it and began to doubt herself until she couldn't bear to be imperfect anymore. Good. |
| _ 2006-10-23 ch 1, | Creepy, in a good way :) The description was amazing, and the way you portray your character's thoughts even more so. |
| SummerWind88 2006-10-08 ch 1, | I only needed to read the first line to learn that you are truly talented in your writing. The creativity with your words flowed very well. And his wife...? Sheesh |
| POedReader 2006-10-07 ch 1, | This was really creepy. It had a lot of good poetic lines, and the ending line was really cool too. P.S. Happy now? |