Quite nice! ;)

m...hot!

Awesome story, I like your wrting style, it has a smiliarity to mine. You're a great writer, keep it up., Poison x..x

Oh my. That was incredibly hot. The only thing I can really critique about it was that sometimes, the dialogue would make the rest of the sentence redundant, like in “WE’RE HEADING HOME NOW,” I yell in Dominic and Jeremy’s ears over the loud music, the caps can be done without.But my, that was really hot. Thank you for making my night. ^^