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| sicklysnowwhite 2007-01-14 ch 1, | abusethe beginning isnt anything like the rest of it, but i like that you said i die/i love school. ironic. simple. short. |
| Mr. Magic 2006-12-29 ch 1, | abuseDescribes my school life perfectly. except for the bus part. I don't ride the bus. Good job! as usual...hope to see more! there better be more. Or else I'm going to...I don't know. I'll think of something later. Magic |
| capriciousguy 2006-12-08 ch 1, | abuseyour right, the intro is a little off, and i thing you should cut out the i breathe i hurt i break. and make it i live i die i love school. funny. the repeditive'ness' is good, but i think that when your reading it you just end up skipping over the 'I' and just reading the verb. live, breathe, hurt, break, die, love school kinda thing, you know? |
| Da Vinci at Work 2006-11-03 ch 1, | abuseHaha. "I love school" goes after "I live I hurt I break I die" Simple, comical, and cool! |
| Microwrite 2006-10-30 ch 1, | abusei think it was good but it draged in the middle. i don't get the die part. but all an all i liked it |
| Sakka-Fenikkusu 2006-10-23 ch 1, | abuseSweet. |
| ignominy 2006-10-10 ch 1, | abuseits kind of almost sorta a list but kind of a list that tells a story. nice though, congrants |
| An-Author-At-Heart 2006-10-09 ch 1, | abuseNice! It's a good and thorough representation of school. I agree with you - here here! LOL I enjoyed it. Btw, thanks SOO much for the reviews, especially on "Hopelessly Devoted". I'm very glad you enjoyed it. |