great chapter! update soon!

Hi! Liked this chappie, it was a bit long... But still short on the whole! Anyway, you've paced out the story nicely so far... There were a few mistakes (FEW), so no need to worry on that aspect. Okay then, keep writing and we'll see.. Until next time, update soon! ^_^

Nice! I love it! Hey, if you don't mind, do you wanna see my stories? They may not be as good as yours but I'm currently working on chapter 8 of my current story Crossover (short for Cross Between Past and Present). If you have some time, wanna see them? I have two stories so far.

Hey there! Good start here. Hm.. It is very short, but I guess that's due to the fact that it is just a prologue, after all.

Anyway, good descriptions, nice plot, and it's really interesting. I do hope you continue this, it's got my attention. You have a nice writing style, it's easy to read and understand. Keep up the good work (but please make the succeeding chapters longer than this!)

So, I'll be keeping an eye on this. Until next review, update soon!

You'll have to forgive me, but I really think a chapter is supposed to be more than this. This is just one scene. Maybe it would be best if you combined the next chapter with this one, or just label this a prologue.

But its your story. Do whatever works for you, I guess. Anyway, good luck with your writing.

I'll check back when you update.

~Dice

this story sounds quite interesting. update soon!

Well I sure hope that the 2nd chappie is longer...I'll be looking to read more...sounds interesting!

Until next time

LoVe Ya

Niki!!