I actually really enjoyed this one. I know exactly what you mean about having a hard time keeping a flow lately. Great write, i need some inspiration. Sigh.

The imagery was excellent! ^^ I really liked this, and I feel for you with the whole flow thingy, cause um. . .it's hard to do somethimes. But this had a nice flow and overall mood. Great job!

I don't know what to make of this... I really, really like the scene you portray and the sweetness of it all, but it just doesn't flow as well as i think you intended it (after reading your authors note). But nevertheless you clearly have a flair for poetry. I'd really appreciate if you had a look at some of my work, no pressure of course. Peace and love from holly.