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| Slightly Obsessive 2008-08-22 ch 1,  | abuseYou've captured the voice and motivations of the character extremely well. |
| toc 2008-06-01 ch 1, anon. | abuseomg. That was so sad. But the guy kept swearing all the time. That was his wife right? Well... That was great. |
| ayadora 2007-10-21 ch 1, | abuseYes. :) That's all. |
| brittle hearts 2007-06-28 ch 1, | abuseWow, this was intense. Good job. :) |
| forty-two dreams 2006-11-01 ch 1, | abuseThat was something. |
| Dawn Gabriel 2006-10-19 ch 1, | abuseAngry. Perfect. That is all. ~SCJ |
| Frore 2006-10-09 ch 1, | abuseI love how you make vulgarity pretty. Great story, a new favorite's list entry. While there are a few grammatical errors, that really isn't enough for me to complain. The metaphors and descriptions in this are perfect, and you know how to handle your characters emotions. |
| Dina JB 2006-10-09 ch 1, | abuseI think it was brilliant, people always document the pain of losing someone but it normally sounds fake because they fail to mention the burden and strain that that person can have... and you've done it so well. You must know that, though, because true writers like yourself have that honesty. Okay... enough with the gushy praises. Very good. from the ever critic, dina |
| Semperfi1994 2006-10-09 ch 1, | abuseThat was sweet, yet sad. Is this a one shot? IF not I need to find out what happens! R&R one of mine? |
| Scrunchy 2006-10-09 ch 1, | abuseIncredible. I don't have much time, but having read this, I feel very compelled to review. I found it, as with everything of yours, very well written. Seeming like a rant of ideas, poured onto the page, given a little structure to guide the flow of emotion. Yeah, I may be talking crap, but I like to kid myself it's crap that reflects what I just read. Loved it. Scrunchy |
| in a jar pk 2006-10-09 ch 1, | abuseit's amazing, if it manages to make me cry. and this piece most certainly did. loved it. xx |