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| Faithless Juliet 2006-11-12 ch 1,  | abuseThe usual affections darling... "A jawful of/bright words behind lips." - 'Bright words,' something so eclectic and mesmerizing about the color behind words. Like what color comes to mind when you see the word 'kiss' or the word 'clock' everyone's perceptions of everything around them is so unique and infused with each personality. "One mouthful of shiny,/metallic description wouldn't/fly out with perfect form/so much as fall/exhausted at whatever/I'd be describing as your perfect form." - Through out this whole piece I continually caught glimpses of young girls, and then nature, like the woods in the springtime. (slim trees, butterflies with/lip-shaped wings) - you use butterflies a few times in this piece, you use them well, but it might just be an American thing on my part. Every girl over here (with the exception of myself) has a butterfly tattoo, or some kind of butterfly metaphor for life. It's exhausting almost. Really enjoyed this though, very nice piece, sorry it's taken me a month to get my ** over here. Jules. |
| not sure yet 2006-10-24 ch 1, | abusevery interesting, i dig it, i like the play with the trees and the light, led to a very interesting effect, muchly enjoyable, well done |
| method acting 2006-10-22 ch 1, | abusesoft and easy like sunday morning and a cup of tea. the images are noncommital and fantastic. nice job. |
| mizu no kokoro 2006-10-20 ch 1, | abuseFP ATE MY REVIEW ;-; noes~ anyways, finally back and still loving your unique style! keep it up |
| Chemically Induced 2006-10-11 ch 1, | abusethis poem has the rythym of a butterfly, which is rather impressive. with all that metaphor, the whole thing sounds like one; the way the hover and bounce then flit and do it again. its wonderful. :) the ending is especially magnificent. magnificent. great poem. love, c.induced. |
| sunday night sky 2006-10-11 ch 1, | abuse... I haven't written a dedicated poem for ages! I must write one! Anyway, I really like this. The name 'Jawings' caught me - the poem itself is very striking. Wonderfully worded. Great piece :D |
| breezy nostrils 2006-10-11 ch 1, | abuseyou sap! lol...that was really sweet. i love the metaphors and the imagery. keep on going! |
| Calligrapher of Hearts 2006-10-10 ch 1, | abusePrettyness! Can tell it's spoken from the heart x |
| bidilmoo 2006-10-10 ch 1, anon. | abusethis is really good, and so are lots of your others, thanks for the reveiw. i only just started put my stuff on here,so i havent got much but thanks :) |
| Nobody-n-Particular 2006-10-09 ch 1, | abuseIntriguing language - ah so delicious |