|Reviews for your illegal in thirty eight states|
| hail.the.bloocheese 7/3/07 . chapter 1
..i feel somehow nostalgic, it's beautifully written in contrast to the dark subject matter. wonderful!
| Last.Real Record Store onEarth 6/14/07 . chapter 1
"i'm sinning six ways to
midnight tomorrow" I liked that one a lot, as well as the Motion City Soundtrack reference in there, one of my fave songs. Great job.
| Her Wishing Well 4/6/07 . chapter 1
Amazing, i adore it!
| just a ray of sunshine 3/16/07 . chapter 1
this set my heart racing and i love the line from the motion city soundtrack song. i lovelovelove them. i also loved the "(I play Russian roulette with a fistful of twenties
& a temper full of heart break)" line. this was pretty incredible.
| boys kiss girls 2/11/07 . chapter 1
I like this. Don't get me wrong, but I like the whole reference to the edgy teenage angst scene. Oh, and I also liked the lyric from Motion City Soundtrack tossed in there. Actually, I think I might go listen to that now. It's one of my favorite songs.
And for some reason this makes me think of a somewhat scary Route 66. Very interesting...
| theoretically beautiful 1/9/07 . chapter 1
"(I play Russian roulette with a fistful of twenties
& a temper full of heart break)" I don't know why but this lne makes me melt.. its great.
| ShadesofBlue69 12/23/06 . chapter 1
and I like this too! It's very edgy, and I like how you tied the beggining of the poem to the end. nice job.
| Sad Songs Remind Me 10/30/06 . chapter 1
I'm pretty sure that's an oral sex reference in there and it seems like a really awkward one at that. Not good.
| riotmaker 10/23/06 . chapter 1
this is incredible. gorgeous writing. gorgeous poem. just all-over amazing.
[adding to favorites]
| klare 10/22/06 . chapter 1
i love it, like i really love, it's gruesome but beautiful. i would fav it but i never fav anything. great work.
| Cheeseraptor5 10/19/06 . chapter 1
Whoa, that was really well-done. I had to improvise with the flow a few times, but I really liked your style. Excellent work.
| dress her up in fairytales 10/10/06 . chapter 1
this should be made into a song. i can just hear it now - it reminds me a lot of songs that i've heard - but definitely in a good way.
| MidnightStar005 10/10/06 . chapter 1
This I really, really LOVE!
| Theory Of The 4th Dimension 10/10/06 . chapter 1
This was nice...the imagery just makes you reminisce about nights like that.
"...thinking about his hips(and my teeth on them..." this scene is kinda ridiculous though, but I get what you're trying to say.
But overall, I like this, and i'm not just saying it. Your metaphors are alot of fun to read so kudos!