I think you should update it. please?

Please update soon. I hope the elve prince save him.

*gasp* You have to save him!The story won't be the same it was working out really good too. Have the prince save Andy! GAH. So interested and excited.

I don't mean to sound mean but, gee Andy sure is a baby! I mean he just starts crying at random. I know he just lost his brother and all, but still, self control is a beautiful thing. Just throughing that out there.

Anywho, I think I figured out your title. Yay me, I couldnt figure out why you would name it Of Elf and Man when there were no elfs, but obviously there is. -Smack forhead- Should've figured that one out sooner. Lol, looking foreward to your next chapt.

I like how this starts, though I feel really bad that Michael had to die.

So if he dies then how does he meet mister cutie stable boy? Also whats gonna happen to poor Andrew. Does he go evil? I hope not. Keep it up, it looks like it could get good.

I really like it so far please keep writing.

This was so cute...

I was almost heartbroken when Michael died, even though I'd read the summary and expected it. Honestly, it does take quite a bit to make the reader feel upset for something they knew would happen.

Critiques... Um, some parts switched a bit too rapidly from one to the next to actually incorporate any worthwhile emotion, but otherwise, it came out well written.

Okay, let's get started.

First of all...the 'ears' thing in the summary. No offense, but anyone can guess from the title and the long-overused 'elves have pointed ears' that the stable boy is an elf. I would suggest you try something else as a side plot/

Secondly, in the second paragraph...*grabs stamp and stamps the review* Show, don't tell.

The events aren't linked together very well. I mean, first the brothers have a boring, boring conversation, after the younger brother leaves, some figure goes and kills the king-to-be. Younger brother finds older brother. Screams and cries.

Definitely not a hook. Your first paragraph needs to grab the readers and tug them in until they couldn't climb out if they wanted too. Your first chapter needs to be exciting or mysterious or something like that so readers will BEG for the next chapter.

I saw one typo, but that's all. Nice job on spelling and grammar, and I'm sure this story will turn out beautifully if you take my critism to heart.

~Fading Innocence

'dazzle me with your hypocrisy'