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Gun 2 the Heart 2008-02-24 ch 20,	abuseYou. Are. Amazing. Enough said =)
merrymowmow 2007-11-22 ch 20,	abuseI was wondering when you're going to update?
Aibari 2007-09-27 ch 20,	abuseOmg yess. This was good. This was really, really good. Thank you for the awesome read. XD The only thing I can think of, crit-wise, is the past/present-thing, but otherwise, this was ... yeah. Excellent. ^^
American Schokolade 2007-09-07 ch 20,	abuseWha, sorry I haven't been reviewing. Busy... Anyway, this was a great story. I see from your note that you had a different ending up originally, and I'm sad that I didn't get to read that one to compare, but, yeah. I don't know--if that ending is more depressing, I guess Jacob probably stayed dead, right? Well, I think that might be better; this ending has kind of the chemical Hollywood-ending taste to it, and it's just too happy, especially with the Cain-and-Kate romance and Wyatt-and-Jackie. It's just too perfect when everyone couples up at the end. Besides, I really liked the idea of Jacob getting shot and killed on a roof, since that goes along with the idea of his whole fear of roofs after his parents and whatnot. I liked that, "The one time he let his guard down," and bam! It would have been a good way for him to go. But then again, that would have taken more developing, too. Like, all throughout the story, Jacob should have been doubting his relationship with Noah -because- Noah made him let his guard down so often. If you had really built up the foreshadowing like that and then offed Jacob on the roof, that would have been cool. But you didn't do that, so I'll stop talking about it. Don't get me wrong, though--I like it how it is. It just needs a little tightening so it's not so sappy, since the sappiness doesn't really match the mood of the rest of the story. Good job, though. You made a really interesting plot and unique story here, so keep it up!
poki 2007-09-07 ch 1, anon.	abuseYou should have had a main character death warning I don't like angst endings. I wish I hadn't read it.
. 2007-09-07 ch 20, anon.	abuseI. HATE. YOU.
Sinister Slash 2007-09-04 ch 19,	abuseWow, this chapter wasn't bad at all! It wasn't too jumpy either, it really reminded me of a movie. This is such a good story, love the action in it. The part with Noah and the cloaked all-black man, I love that part. It's so mysterious and just everything he said had me at the edge of my seat. I really do feel bad that Wyatt is dying. I mean, sure he was bad...but at the end, he did some good. I just wish he could have had a semi-happy or at least pleasent ending with his brother. Instead of bleeding internally to death in the middle of some death hunt with Noah. I feel bad for Bobby too =[ She's dead! Finally. I hate that Noah had to murder all those people, but he's so right. If he hadn't killed her, she had the chance of coming back and harming, once again, his family. I wouldn't have taken that chance either. Not that I hope I'm ever...in that situation. Brillant Chapter, once again. People need to comment it more!!
Cherice T 2007-09-02 ch 19, anon.	abuseWow, this is an amazing story. I really hope you continue to put out chapters that are half as good as this one! You have real talent and I hope you continue to write for a long time! Until next chapter! :-)
Sinister Slash 2007-08-20 ch 18,	abuseFirst off, I want to say I'm sorry. cause my Review got cut off before for some reason! And I couldn't comment again, so sorry. ;] Wow, this is about to get...very action-y I can tell. There's so many different things happening, with Cain and Noah, Jacob and Andes. Everytime I read this, I keep thinking it NEEDS to be made into a movie. [or a book hehe] Yeah, Noah can take care of himself. Wyatt shouldn't be worring about that, it's gonna take a lot more then just men with weapons to kill Noah. Only a few more chapters? Well, all good things have to come to an end right? I loved every minute of this story, your such a brillent writer. I'm seriously on edge here. I need to know what happens next, Andes needs to kill that witch, and Noah's plan needs to turn out all right. But, I know that before everything is fine and perfect, a little hell's gonna have to accure too. -update when ya can- Sinister Slash
Sinister Slash 2007-08-06 ch 17,	abuseOk, so everytime I think it's gonna be ok, something bad happens again. I'm glad cain is back to being normal and ok again! Noah and Jacob
klamydiaa 2007-08-04 ch 17,	abuseThis is brilliant.. 8D I had to skip the part where Noah was injecting Cain I have that small phobia of it xD Anyways Keep going. It's great Bye. xx
Maris. S 2007-07-30 ch 17,	abuseo so there is a way in? I want to know the secret~~! I don't know why, but I'm sbsolutly fascinated with this story. lol and the stable scene with Cain watching Noah and Jacob cracked me up =) Please update as soon as you can! I didn't think that the chapter sucked or anything, so keep up with your hard work~
American Schokolade 2007-07-30 ch 17,	abuseSo Wyatt reemerges, eh? I'm glad he's on the protagonists' side (I think), because they have enough to deal with, right? So, did lending Cain his nanites weaken Noah at all? I thought I saw a little bit of that in this chapter... Cassie's kind of dumb and hotheaded for one in her position. She deserves to get betrayed by her brother. And I wonder what Noah's going to do once he catches up with Jacob (It might be a little worse than the "I can't believe you drugged me" variety). Well, maybe it's good they've split up for now, so the romance won't get in the way of the story... Anyway, I'm looking forward to see where this goes, so keep it up.
Gravilove19 2007-07-07 ch 16,	abuseI can't wiat for your next update. I really am enjoying reading about the boys. Jacob and Noah are perfect for each other. I hope to read more soon.
American Schokolade 2007-07-06 ch 16,	abuse'Nother great chap. I felt the shower scene at the beginning was a little unnecessary, but... The scene between the Fortesques seemed a little glossed over. It was kind of rushed and a few moments I started getting confused about who was doing what. The gestalt moment when we realize Derin was behind it wasn't quite as big an impact as it could have been, and the point when Cassie shot Carl just seemed at little detached. I really liked the Kai-getting-tortured-and-shot scene. Call me a sadist, but I think that was the best part of this whole chapter. It was actually sad... Anyway, I'm still liking this, so keep up the great work!

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