I like the ambiguity of this piece- the oneness of the child and the angel in their struggle is horrifying and yet poignant.
Erisah

this is interesting and actually pretty emotional...you don't see this format too much, like story-poetry in this format but an interesting little piece

Again, you have failed miserably at using anaphora in a way that is beneficial to the poem. It's just redundant instead of invoking.

wow - thats interesting - i think some of the phrasiology could be more direct but the imagary and the idea is facinating - you dont say too much

Wow... you must be a really good writer if you can write something like this with such beauty. Some people write these things so choppily, it's no longer good.

But, you write it just right.

That is depressing, but with the darkness I really love it. Something draws me to this. Great Job!