I really like this. It could potentially remind me of me... well, the first half of it at least. Not really one for bleeding.

I also like how it's abstract but formatted at the same time. Good job.

P.S. I love the lyrics on your bio page. I saw them and then I just had to listen to the song. )

i like it though. the beginning of the second line killed me, it's amazing.

gorgeously written. The haiku format doesn't seem forced in any way & its nicely formatted. Nicely written. Bex xx

Pretty pretty pretty; I am over run with the pretty.

You make me like haikus, that is enough said for us all, I think.

* Noelle

O.O ...

nice...

No, no, this is gorgeous, darling, simply wonderful. The way you formatted it was interesting-you employed a lot of the techniques I myself use, only, you use them better.

The only problem I saw was the authors note-ugh. I HATE when people do that! You just wrote a great piece and then you RUIN it by adding that stupid little-lmfao. Sorry, it just really bugs me. A lot of great poets on this site make the same mistake-just don't do it! Say No!

I was SO disappointed to see that you were one of THOSE poets. Really, it'd add so much more power to the piece if you just didn't use the Authors note!

Alice