I really like this. It could potentially remind me of me... well, the first half of it at least. Not really one for bleeding.

I also like how it's abstract but formatted at the same time. Good job.

P.S. I love the lyrics on your bio page. I saw them and then I just had to listen to the song. =)

i like it though. the beginning of the second line killed me, it's amazing.

gorgeously written. The haiku format doesn't seem forced in any way & its nicely formatted. Nicely written. ~Bex xx

Pretty pretty pretty; I am over run with the pretty.

You make me like haikus, that is enough said for us all, I think.

~* Noelle

O.O ...

nice...

No, no, this is gorgeous, darling, simply wonderful. The way you formatted it was interesting-you employed a lot of the techniques I myself use, only, you use them better.

The only problem I saw was the authors note-ugh. I HATE when people do that! You just wrote a great piece and then you RUIN it by adding that stupid little-lmfao. Sorry, it just really bugs me. A lot of great poets on this site make the same mistake-just don't do it! Say No!

I was SO disappointed to see that you were one of THOSE poets. Really, it'd add so much more power to the piece if you just didn't use the Authors note!

♥ Alice