This one is only slightly different from the others I've read, but still wonderful to read. The words are simple-raw, but very emotional and vulnerable. Very true...this can probably apply to any sorts of people, but I imagine this narrator to be trapped by her parents.

I have two favorite lines in this. The first one is "It feels like I am just alive, but not really living." Very powerful statement. I can really relate to that as I'm sure many others can as well...it's a horrible feeling, especially when you just realize it. The other one is the very last line. It seems to me a little paranoid but not really if you think about it...also that the narrator is calling herself a victim and that everyone wants her to crack as if they'd enjoy it.

Another good job. :)

that's really sad. it gives a great effect, but now after reading it, i cant help but feel a bit bummed. I've noticed a great deal of your poems are somber and tragic. you've got a great talent for capturing the more serious and unhappy moods

This was so moving, the last few lines are so strong. I really like this!

Thanks for the review!

Oh wow. This piece is really powerful, so desperate. I've felt like this before too. No one deserves it though.. I hope you feel better now.

This is great! I love the emotion put into it. The reader can really feel the authors passion. Keep writing!

very vivid emotions described. well done

keep writing

beautiful & heartwrenchingly (sp?) written. the emotion in this comes out really well & you can tell youve really poured alot into this. nice work. Bex xx

wow, this is a really powerful poem. Personally, I think it would even make a fantastic song! Thanks so much for reviewing me by the way xD and also for the add.

-Alex

This is cool, the flow is great. I just like how it seems to say everything in one gigantic pulse, if that makes any sense?

Hauntingly familiar...reminds me of my own ruminations. Thank you for the review, by the way, and since I've so often felt that way, I decided to write out my feelings. So very often my father threatened me for being depressed (and I was), but for the most part, I was having to come to terms with a part of me that was very different than before. I'm glad you felt such a connection to the poem; I was hoping it would have that effect.

Laters,

KD

hm. you're right. as a poem by itself, it isn't very good-as you put it, it's just a bunch of words put together.

however, i think it's how real people think, given that 'trapped' feeling... and i suppose, that's the saving grace of this piece. it's not poetic, but then again, some things in life like the feeling of being 'nobody' isn't as beautiful as most people put it. this is a good reflection of that feeling. :) great job!

beautiful...like the way it ends :)

*claps* you know what I think!

*winks* Greatness!

Anna _

This is just a bunch of words put together, and this isn't one of my beste poems. I just wanted to post it for some reason. I wanted it to be out there. It made me feel better to write it.

Thanks so much for anyone who reads this.

HUGS & KISSES