Hey! This was so awesome. It's beautiful...It's awesome...

a. this is an INCREDIBLE idea for a series, kudos :)

and i loved this, alot

Aww, you have a master... AND IT'S... well... EITHER ME OR SIGMAS!

But I think SigmaS has dibs...

"Painted grin gathering dust" my favorite part of the whole poem? Why? I have no idea. The imagery maybe? Plus, I was trying to discern what you meant there...used and abused and hung out to dry? Abandoned? That was the best I could come up with.

Interesting. The flow was a little choppy in places, but overall, it's a bit hypnotic. Good use of adjectives. Keep writing!-R.Answered

i like this and in some way's i can relate. very good imagery. all in all i liked it