I love it. The imagery is fantastic.

Umm... the delicate diamond dreams and the delirious worship are okay, but the whole poem (of four lines)kinda seemed choppy and didn't connect to anything, really. I dunno, It's not your dramatic style, I guess. So yeah, re work it into something you normally would do. (Too lazy to sign in... again)

woah...heehee...definitely short and to the point and totally lost on me...I don't understand what it symbolizes at all...Am I sleepy or am I sleepy. Amazing word use though. Beautiful imagery. You're going to have to explain it to me.

i just loved how you worded this. beautiful poem.

This is really cool- I get the sense of being confused, excited, exhilarited, and frightened at the same time. Nicely done, all that in four lines.

You made good use of alliteration in your first two lines. The second two work in a juxtaposed sort of way, but I like it. What you have here in sixteen words is better than the vast majority of what I see in the "just in" pile. Good work.