o i actually like this poem of yours. i really just like the way u worded it and painted the picture and my favorite line is 'so break into my open mind, and pick apart my rancid thoughts.' very good poem. keep writing!

I love how you ended this, using the eighth and ninth lines to build the suspense, and ended it with such perfect rhythm! I had to re-read it a few times as well. And the imagery is beautiful!

&love, Scarlett

This is really beautifully profound. I had to read a couple of times to pull out the truth in it. Yes, the seeds we sow so hastily throughout the day do come to us at dusk...and we need someone to tell us it's okay, we did the best we could...so that we might be able to rest peacefully, ready to face the morrow...

I shall try to read more of yours later...I liked the "feel" of this one. Truly, Tourterelle