|Reviews for Fall and Crash|
| chuff 10/12/06 . chapter 1
I find the way you expressed the emotions of your character, or of yourself (whichever it may be, though I certainly haven't thrown out the possibility that it could very well be both), to be well-written.I find the subject of suicide (or of slitting the wrists in particular) to be obscenely trite. I believe that you may perhaps have the imagination to create a far more imaginative piece of work, but due to the restraint of the topic, I would dare say you did a fine job portraying the feelings of the character (or yourself, as aforementioned)This of course only pertains to your work in Fall and Crash if suicide was indeed your objective. If not, then I've both misinterpreted and "drops of red" and "crimson chasms", and have doubly embarrassed myself.I normally do not critique the writing itself, only miscellaneous typographical errors when I believe I see them, and in your piece I noticed in sentence four, paragraph two, you may perhaps have meant "begin" when in fact you wrote and published "being".
I wouldn't go so far as to say it isn't a common mistake.