I agree, the author's note is a little redundant.
And something about the repetion of those variations of 'rusty gears' kinda turns me off. I think you could have given the poem a lot more depth if you would have used different words in their place, you know?
I also don't really like "Wise words."
Gosh, wow, I never give this much criticism on a poem, especially one I really like, but I really like this anyway, it could just be idk better or something.
Clockwork is such a cool theme; I use it a lot. =)
Nice.
~Sara.

I really like this. Honestly, I could have done without the authors' note which explains it, because I like poems that are mysterious, and I can think about them and, ultimately, find out (make up?) about what it means to me. All in all, though, you're a great writer. Glorious job!

Peace and Love

~> Lifted

I believe I can see your idea here, your relationship running like clockwork until the gears rust and stop. I really love that analogy. ( If I just used the wrong 'a' word, my bad. ^^; I'm a little out of it. ;) )

The italics/underlining/bolds are good. Enough to catch your attention, but not overdone.

'Our conversations like complexities'. It's just my opinion, but I think it would be better as a metaphor than a simile.

Nice work!
Violet

I honestly seriously like this poem. It speaks out to anyone that has had a few relationships, keep up the good work.





thank you very much for your reviews, it means a lot, another poem of mine I think you'd like is "I never knew". Its my personal favorite, you should check it out

Fantastic. I love the (I didn't realize this existed but...) extended simile. ^_^ I especially found the usage of bold font, italicizing, and underlining really interesting and just...well, great. The format and diction is just perfect. Wonderful to read and interesting to think about. Great job!

Smooches-Wizzy