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| BDhei 2006-10-12 ch 1,  | abuseThere were some spelling errors, and words were used that didn't really make sense. "It cut though you like a knife A forever wound not healed by time" Those two bugged me the most, because they didn't make much sense. Other than that, interesting concept. And though not daringly original, it proved itself "not bad". -Blasphemous Bootsie. "So, come my loves, I have a new paddle that needs to be broken in, and you have some skin that just needs to be broken..." |