You look promising. :) I admit, I've grown sick of FP romances. I never thought the day would come since I'm usually careful not to read too many cliches all at once, but I can't find any romances on this site worth reading more than once or twice anymore. The ideas are recycled so often everything reads like white noise, and the average writing is incredibly lacking. Or maybe I've been in a particularly unforgiving mood lately. Somehow, thank goodness, I came across your profile. And then this one-shot.

You are so young, but your writing is so developed. You've captured that old-school historical, slightly lyrical style, patterned your own writing after it nearly flawlessly, and you do a good job shaping your story. Heartwarming, mellow, sweet, picturesque. Not non-cliched but a balm to my frustrated searching nonetheless.

For this one-shot specifically, you reach far and you nearly end up somewhere magnificent. Nearly. You have the storytelling, you have the writing, you have the oh-so-beautiful descriptions, but you miss magnificent by just a tad because your characters leave a bit to be desired. Sara is wonderful, Oliver is wholesome, and Liam is radiant, but they're jarringly one-dimensional at times, a bit too predictable. For the entire last half, I was waiting for Sara to unveil her eyes, see Oliver's love, and fall into his embrace. Because of that, I wanted a little more at the end; I wanted to see a little deeper into why Sara chose Oliver other than overall wholesomeness and companionship. It was disappointing to see the potential summarily capped with a general, hackneyed "she wouldn’t have had it any other way."

But I mention that bit about characterization because otherwise, this piece reaches for perfection. It's good, really really good, and I enjoyed it (which is honestly more than can be said for hundreds of other fics posted here). I will be regularly revisiting your profile from now on; you look very promising indeed. :D Good luck!

Utterly predictable and utterly adorably beautiful. You might want to split it up into chapters though. It's a bit long. Beautiful other than that, and if anyone knows how homework assignments can turn into stories, it's me. Probably half of the stuff I've written started out as homework.

hello! this is the same girl who reviewed your meg ramsey story, by the way... i finally have an account! yay!

i have to say that i like meg's story better than this one. not that this one isn't good - it's great! but i did see some paralells between the two... especially the sobbing scene that ends in a kiss. i was wondering - which one did you write first? that scene as part of your creative writing class and then you re-used it for meg? or did you write it for meg and re-use it for sara? just wondering...

So nicely done. And not to mention adorable!! I'm a sucker for cute little stories. =]

This piece is incredibly eloquent. You have great control of language and use atypical sentence structure to keep the story worth reading. And the characters are so fantastic. I relate to Sara really well; I think many people can. This is going on my favorite list. *faery tragedy

This reads like a fairy-tale...it's so pretty! I also was happily surprised by the ending! Good job!

Dude! This was incredibly long but incredibly good. I love the history you put into it. I could not place the setting precisely. I am thinking 1800s America or ... Ireland? You had a lot of Irish names, so you know, although Oliver is just not ...

Anyways, I am not a big fan of similes and metaphors, but you used them very tastefully and that is to be commended. Nice job. I also like your style. It sounds like a mix between nineteenth century and today. I mean it has that dated quality but still retains its contemporary flare at the same time. It is elegant, very elegant.

Nice topic: Infatuation is a very powerful and flexible theme. I like how you wrote a story around it. Most of the time infatuation fics are rather shallow. I can sympathize with Sara all to well, but I did not have such a happy ending. No, I am a bit of a mman-hater for the time being. Hahaha. It will pass I am sure.

lovely story! you do write the best love stories.

~ABH

Ha ha! When you posted this I thought you were posting a completely new story and I was about to give you a talkin-to! lol!

The completed work is fantastic! I love it!

in my cynically view a tad cliched but adorable...

Aw,I loved it! You write so well!

aw, i'm glad that she and oliver ended up together because liam was horrible. cya later ~ Alenor.