It is I, Kyle! So I am reviewing the first chapter of this. I have only recently seen Phantom of the Opera and LOVED IT so I had to read this. First let me go over mistakes I found:
4th Paragraph/4th sentence- seperate 'before' and 'the'
8th paragraph/2nd sentence- 'through' should be 'threw'
8th paragraph/6th sentence-No comma between 'wall' and 'without'
9th paragraph/4th sentence-'deviace' should be 'devious'
11th paragraph/1rst & 2nd sentence- 'strait' to 'staight'
15th paragraph/ 2nd sentence- 'disapoint' to 'disappoint'

Anyway, I loved the first chapter. It is an interesting idea. I like how you use 'he' and 'him' to stress his importance, it is a nice touch. The scene where the apprentice was messing with Gabriel, it was very well written and described. It makes me wonder if you have done something like this before? Great job. I will read chapter 2 soon.-ProphecyHider

This is very strange... I'm submitting myself a review. Interesting... Well, I might add more chapters to this, but until then, this is all I've got. I was pretty proud of it, to be honest, though I would appreciate the readers to decide whether or not it's any good.

Great story! This is very well written, with just the right amount of suspense and a thrill to match. There's even a surprising little, for lack of a better term, twist at the end.

Overall, I liked it! It's nice to see cool stories well written, which is something I'm not completely used to.

Thank you for sharing!