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| The Cowardly Lion 2007-04-23 ch 1,  | abuseI like this. It's well written, it uses interesting words,I like Icarus! He's cool as far as people who fall into the ocean and die go... |
| Irony's.Last.Words.Were 2007-04-07 ch 1, | abuseOh-ho! Good question at the end. :D I like your wit when you write, it makes for an amusing and thought provoking piece. It also helps that you have such a way with words. I enjoy reading your works, they are all very good. -Irony |
| Hiddenstars 2006-11-09 ch 1, anon. | abuseThat was... incredible. Lovely description and word choice. Greek mythology is facinating, and the tale of Icarus is so... overshadowed. I'm really glad that you wrote this, so I offer you my praise...^^ |
| Azriella Rayne 2006-10-26 ch 1, | abuseThis is absolutely beautiful. I love it and to say this much (don't argue) this poem is flawless and I think I'm going to constantly re-read this *makes happy face* My favorite part is the ending with Perdix. |
| Ironic Presence 2006-10-26 ch 1, | abuseI just read about the story of Icarus today in English. weird how I found your poem the same day... I really like it, though. Good job. |
| -MyInspiration- 2006-10-23 ch 1, | abusebeautiful. really does the story justice. |
| A Disturbing Fancy 2006-10-21 ch 1, | abuseI adore mythology, so naturally this poem is right up my alley. I do think it could be tweaked, but poetry really isn't my strong point, so I won't say anything. I love it. I will read more soon! |
| Vixen of Vienna 2006-10-19 ch 1, | abuseHey, I would have reviewed sooner, but FP, as you may know, was revamping and everything. I am not too thrilled about the new look of the sight but whatever. On to the review: Your rhyming is a bit forced in places, and your meter is off. Do not worry. My meter sucks worse than anything. Um, but I love the subject matter. Unique idea of going after the myth and and seeing what happens. I never thought of Daedalus having a troubled exile like that. I actually never liked him, but this poem gives a little humanity to him. And that is always a good thing. What else? Check out some of my other stuff. I think I will read some more of yours in the meantime. Ciao. |
| Marajohuiki 2006-10-17 ch 1, | abuseThis sounds like a ballad to me. It's a wonderful poem and I really like the flow. A few of the lines are slightly off in rhythm because of some words being having one too many syllables. I like this because I know who Daedalus, Perdix and Icarus were. Some readers might not know. Maybe you can put some author's note in somewhere to explain that they're from Greek mythology. |