Reviews for You're The First - FictionPress.com

angel953 2006-12-26 ch 1,	abuseCool piece. This has quite some interesting thoughts in it. Good job. :D
Black and White Dreams 2006-12-07 ch 1,	abuse0.o I really like this, but some of it didn't make much sense to me. Maybe it's just where you cut the lines... I don't know. I really, really like this though =) Great job. ~Black and White Dreams~
laughing in her sleep 2006-12-02 ch 1,	abuseo this one's cool, and i like how u repeated the last line btw thanx for all the reviews, sorry it took so long 4 be 2 review back
Evelyn Tan 2006-10-29 ch 1,	abuseFirstly, I'm not sure whether you could call this a song. o.O It doesn't seem to have much of a rhythm to it, but maybe you have it and stuff, so yea. Secondly, I don't really like how you shift the last word to the next line so many times. It kind of makes reading a little hard. Everytime I came across it, I had to go up one line and read it through again to let it make sense. "You have been dying / In and when you..." I didn't really get that part. Dying in? Nice try, but I think this could've been better. =) Thanks for the comment anyway! -hugs-