I love this - it's dark and somehow simultaneously amusing. I love the rhyming, and the dialogue was genius.

That old guy reminds me of Johnny Depp. Don't know why, I just thought of Edward Scissorhands.

(And if you want to really see something horrific, then go to any search engine images, type in either lemon party, goatsee, or tub girl).

Oh man, this is absolutely brilliant. I lvoe it to pieces!

This is an awesome job!

I can't critique but I know good when I see it.

Keep it up, PLEASE.

The only part I didn't understand was the "tap tap tap" I don't get what happened just there.