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Frore 2006-10-18 . chapter 1
This poem actually gives me the impression of resentful jealousy between the lines. I think a little more revision is necessary, as some of the lines are a bit redundant (e.g. "...Silent screams escape my lips/ And are lost in the silence...")but this piece is by no means unsalvagable.
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