Oh my god, you're GOOD.
I'm something of a sceptic when it comes to poetry, but even I can see the value of this one!

'because perspective is a savior from the truth' amen to that.
There's astounding perspective in this one, but a hell lotta truth as well.

Well done! And now I'm off to scout the rest of your awesome work. Write on!

This piece just-/exposed/ me, y'know? I felt naked and vulnerable, all right her in front of my computer screen. I had to turn off the music in the backround just to concentrate.

The authors note didn't hinder this at all-excellent work. You have a knack for alliteration.

♥ Alice

Beautiful.

Great line = 'The funeral was just a reminder / That the coffin lid won't stay shut.' And the whole first stanza...and the last two lines...all of it. Excellent job.

this is incredible! absolutely amazing.

Rain falls on everyone

sigh... i can relate, and it is true... feelings are hard to let go.

keep writing!

***. this hits especially hard, especially now. but even if She wasn't gone, i still would have thought this was written beautifully. 'we were like fireworks' -- beautiful imagery. 'and from those dizzy heights we fell' -- i adore this line. absolutely gorgeous. 'but we clutch at falling stars' -- **, that is just perfect. absolutely flawless. lovelove it. 'because perspective is a savior from the truth' -- beautiful, interesting line. i like it. 'everything has a time to die' -- so painfully true, so beautifully written. i love it, i love it. 'and we continue drifting aimlessly' -- written so simply, but so beautifully at the same time. i love the imagery of it. 'waiting for the rain and waiting for our release' -- oh, such a gorgeous line. again, flawless imagery. this poem is beautiful. 'blinded by the possibility of progress' -- what an amazing line. i love it. 'we just keep falling behind ...' -- a beautiful, powerful ending to an amazing poem. definitely a favorite -- beautiful. just gorgeous.

Beautiful-that is all I am left to say.

This is beautiful.

~* Noelle

Very nice...*claps*

this is absolutely beautiful. soso raw. something everyone has to confront & - mygod - this tore me open. i love it.

-kait

"blazing pearls of infinite impossibilities against an inevitable end" i love that line.

omfg this is amazing... so much imagery and lots of emotion.. good job mang --b