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Sakka-Fenikkusu 2006-10-25 . chapter 1
I completely understand people mistaking you for a poet. I have more poems than stories, too. I prefer to think of myself as a poetic writer.

"A million love songs lay useless on the desk because they never touch on the feelings that are weighing in my chest."

I feel so tempted to make fun of you for this. Consider yourself lucky that I'm not posting on all my forums, "Bread writes sappiness!" Okay, I wouldn't really do that. Or would I?

Nice job with this. I love everything you write. I worship everything you write. You make me really not want to eat any bread. Because, it feels like... cannibalism.

BREAD IS GOD

WORSHIP BREAD

Ok, so maybe that's going a little too far, considering that you reacted to me just calling you "awesome", but, really, you rock beyond belief.

Without Brains

Ms. Fenikkusu
Sevidian 2006-10-24 . chapter 1
Very, very, very good! I loved this. Keep writing, because you have got talent. This was definately the best poem I've ever read!
Arter 2006-10-24 . chapter 1
Wow... this was so good, it gave me chills.
Possibly the first thing I've read on Fictionpress to do so.
Amazing work, keep it up.
Nurgette 2006-10-22 . chapter 1
This is quite a good piece; you have used some great phrases, such as "People are... time" and "Your whispers...veins", and the rhyming isn't too overpowering. It is in an interesting format; not quite poem and not quite prose/letter. I think more could have been said if it were slightly longer, but nevertheless, it is an interesting bit of writing.
felicia13 2006-10-19 . chapter 1
Way to have self-doubt. Don't delete poems ... it's sad. Poetry = fun. Even if you don't think so ...

Ok. This was pretty nice. It brings to mind a lot of things ... like a person standing amidst a crowd in fast-forward, so that they're standing there in normal time while everything moves past them. Also brings up the pool of blood next to the dead body holding the still-smoking gun.

So, it was pretty good and thought-provoking. Great work!

Felicia.
WyrdWolf 2006-10-19 . chapter 1
^_^ I know, it's such a cause for celebration! This was sweet, though, and I love the last two lines. Very cool.
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