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| Alteng 2006-10-25 ch 1,  | abuseThis is an entertaining little story. A big critique I could say is that I love how you describe the Dr.'s office, but you need not tell us that he is a bit nuts. That is rather shown in the description, and even more so when he is talking to Sybil about his real name. Another little bit to point out, I would think that it would take a bit more convincing on his part to believe her. Doctor he is, and doctors try to find logical reasons, and after all, she is a pyschiatric patient. I love your names you use, and I thought Seymour in Little Shop of Horrors survived the ordeal, but he was really a nerd. I would think the name Sybil was chosen because she might have multiple personalities. And Chalcis Tiresias Bing has a great sound to it. I love your description of the office and Sybil and bitdy like features. That was great imagery. |