aww! that is so sad. this is another gr8 poem really. i'll check out the rest of your work later on but for now your work is really promising. =D

Hm...angsty...sad...depressing...which makes it a great piece of work! I like the emotion and the tension captured. Godd job to you!

NC

Every stanza has really good feeling that gives the poem this great weight to it. Kudos!

A beautiful poem, indeed. The stanzas are so powerful, even if the rhyming is just a tad off. Nicely done, Shadow. Keep up the good work! (:

Sino inspiration mo dito? LOL Nice poem! Idol na kita sa poems.

hey. it's not a bad poem, which isn't very surprising since you're a great writer. the... rhyming/rhythm is rather off, but the feelings are still there.

speaking of feelings, what brought this on? i'm concerned. we rarely talk nowadays, i hardly know what's going on in your life. we seriously have to talk more.

take care always! -hugs-

"Who is she? When did she come along?
She ruined everything. She took you away, she tore us apart,
Or is it me after all... What did I do wrong?"

Ah, very powerful. Now this was wonderfully written. But who perhaps could this be referring to? A leech maybe...?

I really liked this. Good job. =D

This is powerful. Really well-written; keep it up.

wow...i needed to read that, awsome!

I LOVE IT. SO MUCH. I have been through this its so relatable! I love it you captured the feeling so well!