   fallin4ualwayz 2007-06-29 . chapter 1aw thats sweet! |
 caralita 2006-11-03 . chapter 1i liked this, i can relate. i really like the first and sixth stanzas. good work :) |
 Mortifer Amor Phasmus 2006-10-29 . chapter 1good work, an excellent expression of the longing we can feel. |
 myheartbelongstosuperman 2006-10-27 . chapter 1Aw, that's so romantic... another great poem! |
 Infinity Plus One 2006-10-26 . chapter 1The centrality of the alignment adds to the already wonderful air of the poem. |
 anewcreatureinchrist 2006-10-24 . chapter 1Great description. Absolutely beautiful. Great job!! |
 not sure yet 2006-10-23 . chapter 1pretty decent and lil sad, good rhytm though, i dig it, well done |
 Jack Saucy 2006-10-19 . chapter 1very nice flow in this. and i love the repetition of the first line. bravo! |
 SARGENT PEPPER 2006-10-19 . chapter 1 I LIKE THIS , ITS ALMOST REAL. KUDOS TO YOU. KEEP ON WRITING, JOEY |
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