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| Mortifer Amor Phasmus 2006-12-20 ch 3,  | abuseThis story is coming along very nicely. I find it is very accurate as well. though it could use a tad more editing. |
| Love-and- Lust 2006-11-27 ch 1, | abusehey chica i love this. idk y but it wont let me put anyting new on, has it done that to you lately? well talk to ya l8er e-mail me k! |
| Katrina O.X 2006-11-26 ch 3, anon. | abuseI'd have to say, this was VERY confusing. You switch from first person POV, to third person omnicient, then back to first person. I'd recomend that you edit your chapter and put it back up, all in one POV. Besides the POV thing, this was pretty good. I just wish the chapters were a bit longer. Katrina xx |
| Mortifer Amor Phasmus 2006-11-15 ch 2, | abuseA new character, a world of new possibilities. Don't worry, i would definately wait to see where this story goes. |
| kelsi bones 2006-11-15 ch 2, | abuse"The question was asked my third grade teacher a week before I came out" Did you mean "by my"? "I would runaway" It should be run away, not runaway. "She looks untouchable. Like nothing could touch her." This didn't need to be repeated. A few mistakes, but good job :) Can't wait for an update. Katrina xx |
| Max Radio 2006-11-13 ch 2, | abuseThe length has improved, a little, and I'm glad to see that you've taken my suggestion. :D It sounds interesting, and I can't wait to see how you plan on pulling it off with a K+ rating... |
| yellowStar 2006-11-12 ch 2, anon. | abusehmmn. interesting.. keep writing.. :) |
| Mortifer Amor Phasmus 2006-10-29 ch 1, | abuseAh, that is so sad. His boyfriend was so evil. It was very well written, and I commend your bravery for refusing to turn your back on a good story! |
| myheartbelongstosuperman 2006-10-27 ch 1, | abuseThis is another theme that I commend you for addressing. I'm looking forward to seeing where this story is going... |
| kelsi bones 2006-10-24 ch 1, | abuseI think that if you put some work into this, you could come up with an amazing story. Good luck. Katrina |
| yellowStar 2006-10-20 ch 1, | abusecool. well, it's sorta sad, but that's my thing. hehe. keep writing! :) |
| Max Radio 2006-10-19 ch 1, | abuseIt'd be cool if you just started in on a story in the next chapter, like this was just a thought or something. Whatever, though. Short. Summary shouldn't give away stuff...(mm)And it would be great if it didn't. Seriously, just do stuff your way, I'll stick around. |