I loved the first verse, the following two were good, and I loved the last verse even more than the first. I would love to give you a more detailed review and some sort of explanation as to why I loved that last verse.. but it seems I am not quite capable of this, so telling you that the last verse was magical will have to be enough.

Wow, the imagery and word choice are so stunning, seriously. Just the intro grabbed my attention...when you write these things, it makes me have that "why haven't I ever thought of that before?" kind of moment, because it fits so well. Haha, I don't really know what I'm saying. All I know is, your language is delicious. :)

The first stanza was paritcularly perspicacious - I had to read it twice in order to register its implications completely, a good sign, I would say. Fresh, original.

Extraordinarily visual. I like how you've tied this all together with a tangibility that is relatable for the reader. Well done.

liking the recurrent Kool-Aid :P




you have such an amazingly striking, personal style. it's wonderous. that line :




your lips showed my eyelids yellow.





... amazing i'm serious. where else do you find imagery that strong? and






my first balloon, ribbonning high, higher, highest







... you are a goddess

Hm, what a creation once again. You always surprise me with your beautiful style and choice of words. Your words truly move me and I highly enjoy reading them. Here's to you and once again thank you for your continuous reviews!

Haha! I love this!
I can relate quite well to what you're describing. I've thought this more than once.

Great job.