Excellent piece of writing! You've a perfect flow throughout, and your subject matter is deep enough for it not to matter that the rhymnes simple. It becomes almost ironic considering the underlying complexity of the situation and the piece itself.

VERY VERY WELL DONE

KEEP WRITING!!

F.C

I can really relate to this. Excellent, but I agree that it is a little childish in the wording.

YOu have no idea how much i can relate to this...its quite well written too.