I noticed a couple of typos but other than that, it's cool. I liked your words and descriptions. Can't say plot's original, but the manner by which you presented it is great nonetheless. The flow is smooth, the lesson, clear. Great writing. Kudos.

Oh, and yeah. The story writing itself out? A lot like life, actally. You can plan it all you want, but of course it doesn't always end up according to plan. Spontaneity. That's what makes it special, I guess.

Dude, I don't care if it came out all different from what you originally planned, it's bloody AWESOME!! I love the concept, and you wrote it brilliantly. It's one of the few stories I've read on this site where I've got nothing to critique about it. Nice job!! ;)

~+ PhoenixAura ~*