u like these suspenseful stories don't u?

really cool. u have the talent for these things. y don't u write a long one?

You are really good at thrillers, and your use of grammar is probably the best I’ve seen on Fictionpress. Usually, I would have something constructive to say. Something like; ‘it would have been better if you had done such and such,’ or ‘you probably should have added such and such’. For this story however, I have no criticism to offer. It was suspenseful and emotive, well written and (in a weird way) aesthetic. You are now on my 'favorite authors' list.

*sighs dreamily* I love plot twists. Well done; I commend thee! Keep writing. :)

~S. Sage

I absolutely adore stories such as this. The ending is my favorite. Intense. I'll be sure to read more of your posts :)

Hey, another sucker for plot twists eh? I like that. You read my story, so I thought that I would return the favor and I must say that you aren't bad yourself. ^^ Looking forward to reading more.

~SorrowfulSoul~

You seem to have a skill for cliffhangers, haha. This story would have to be my favourite out of what you have written so far. By the way, where'd you come up with your pen name? I quite like it.

Whoa, another intense one, nice job!

Sincerely,
Emma Noble

This was great, really well written. I liked the way you didnt give away too much, which keeps us guessing. Keep up the good work!

poor poor guy... but i like the plot twist. it's good.

Evil!! Well, it was unexpected but in a good way. Nice

This story was...well, You've done better before, mate.
What I liked about it was the scene with the start, and the dialogue with the police man. The start was really tense, with the secrecy and the words that were used. And the part with the police man was really nice! The dialogue was really well-written, and you made it so clear with the words you chose, what Dalton makes the police man believe that he is. What I really missed in this text, was more descriptions on the characters' appearance. It would've added tension to the text, and made it much better. I can understand that one of the points of this text was to not let the reader in on such information, but I really prefer more informative stories.
Waiting for more from you!
Uchiha Hatori

This is really well-written; the suspense builds up very nicely. I'd like to see some more like this.